Class,
Please read Kashanna's blog posting. Kashanna, I am sorry to pick on your posting - but it was a great opportunity and example of a short throw to making it better.
I personally revised Kashanna's blog posting.
1. Changed her headline to make it more relevant.
2. Chopped her paragraphs into the size they should be.
3. Picked out where she could be more specific
4. Highlighted where I wanted to get to know her point of view better.
5. Connected her great introduction to the the articles themselves.
Please read her posting and comment on it.
Perri Richman
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